I want to tell you about Tri Mutia who has many hobbies. her first hobby is singing because it can make her happy. Her second hobby is reading a book, for she get more knowledge by reading a book. Anothers hobby is watching K-Pop music video especially 2PM's music video. The last hobby is jogging because can make her health. That's all about Mutia's hobbies which it makes her life meaningful.
Dear, make the font bigger, ok. Please mark the TS and CS as well in ur paragraph. It's good u can develop ur TS though u have to give more info on the supporting sentences. Moreover, it's better 4 u 2 use different type of sentences. Em waiting 4 better writing next time:-)
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